England, which is located on the other side of the Earth, has many differences with South Korea.  Culture, physical views and food are all examples of this. Education is also one of the biggest differences between England and South Korea.

Education is a serious matter in South Korea. They have been achieving many successful outcomes through the years. South Korean students have been consistently ranking at the top of the Programme for International Student Assessment (PISA) 2012 survey results in reading, mathematics and science. According to BBC News, six common South Korean students who were 16, managed to finish GCSE maths paper in half of the time that they were given, and four of them got 100%, the other two just lost one mark.

(http://www.theguardian.com/news/datablog/2013/dec/03/pisa-results-country-best-reading-maths-science)
 

South Korean education is ‘all work, no-play’ education. As the performance of education got higher, they had to get more pressure on. South Korea became a country with highest number of teenagers’ suiciding and the reason seems to be the pressure of getting satisfying result in all of their works.  
(http://www.bbc.co.uk/news/education-25187993)

British Educational system isn’t pressurised as South Korean, but at the same time, British students aren’t ranking high as South Korean students. In the Programme for International Student Assessment (PISA) 2012 survey results in reading, mathematics and science, UK is ranking on 26th, which is not a very bad place to be ranked but not extremely high as well.

The most important reason for why these two countries’ educational systems are different can be the way of learning. As an example, the progress of learning their second language or maths is very different. In South Korean school, they learn English as their second language. They focus mostly on vocabulary and grammar when they are learning English. In Britain school, when they are learning their second language like French or Spanish, they try to focus on many different things like speaking fluently, reading, writing, vocab and grammar. When they learn maths in South Korean school, for most of the time they spend their time on memorizing equations and practicing lots of question. In Britain school, it is more about understanding the progress of working.

It is very interesting how South Korea and England has such big differences in way of getting educated. South Korean Education caused South Korea to rank higher than Britain as it said in the result for PISA 2012, but also has very pressurised and difficult progress. On the other hand, England has been ranking lower than South Korea but has better environment for students to study and more relaxed progress. Based on my experience, I still think South Korean educational system is very successful but I personally preferred British education because it wasn’t tiring and I was still able to learn.










Jio Ryu
Grade 8
Wycombe Abbey School
 

Dear Jio Ryu,

You have an interesting comparison paper on two essentially disparate culture on education. What makes it gripping is the fact that you have first hand experience of both sides of the system. I am happy that you have included statistics on ranks and surveys. 

Highlights:
1. Your approach of trying to conclude with a positive outlook has strengthened your paper.
2. Also I am happy that you are sensitive to your surroundings and perceptive about the differences. 

Points to improve on:
1. Try to use precise and economical language. Sometimes, your sentences distract the reader from what you’re trying to say by saying it incorrectly such with grammatical errors and awkward phrases.
2. Give your essay momentum by making each of your paragraph work together and move to a point. Also, your conclusion was a bit abrupt. One way to fix this is by thinking about your main point and moving your essay towards that point. 
3. When you point out differences or make analysis that may offend people, try to assuage the controversy by making it personal. 

Overall, you did great! With your insightful content you were able to pull me, as a reader, out of the jaws of a topic of controversy. You are a thinker, and I am glad that you showed your reflections with genuineness and positivity. I can’t wait to read more of your articles! Keep up the work!
 


 

 

 

 

 

 

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