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  • Ga Yun (Lynna) Kim
  • 승인 2019.01.09 17:18
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  • Jason 2019-01-13 09:53:17

    Interesting experience - watch the grammar here and there. I challenge you to elaborate more on how you felt, why this event may be relevant, what you got out of it, etc. You take a stab at it in the last paragraph, but you should elaborate more on that and make it the focus of your article.   삭제

    • Rachel Lee 2019-01-12 15:04:38

      Reading this article, I felt that you were able to participate in a unique experience that others across the nation will appreciate! I think it would’ve been helpful if we were able to know how you became involved in this bazaar!   삭제

      • Jaehong Min 2019-01-11 16:54:04

        Such a heartwarming experience you had here. It's quite special that you got to be a part of the Korean community in your area, and give back to the community by participating in a meaningful and international event. I could feel that this experience contributed to your personal growth. Good job!   삭제

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